this was from architects week[TSA's way of getting the students out of the studio]
steve cassell-from ARO-juried and OUR TEAM WON!!! [oops! did i just drop that??]
ok...i want to mention that i went to penn[and had k.kaseman] b/c it might help me actually get a job...but i don't want to come across as a a**hole....
dispense all your all-knowing wisdome here...
posted by ekeith @ 5:07 PM
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ok, i'm gonna call these pages 1,2,3 and 4 respectively.
on page 1, in terms of the text, i'm not to keen on the phrase 'sense of being-in-time'. it seems like what you're hinting at in this project is a method of incrementing a void. also... one thing i like to do now in writing about arch is to avoid the word 'space'. it is SOOOO overused. time to bust out that thesaurus.
page 2 - i wouldn't call those images on the right 'details'. because they aren't. :)
page 3 looks good, but those dotted lines are bothering me. if possible, i would go back and lower the lineweight and make the dashes MUCH smaller.
page 4 deserves a bit more in the rendering. i would consider shrinking the line drawings that are on the left, removing the repeated drawing at the bottom, and enlargening the perspective and adding some detail. your job is to make that place look inviting. plus... where the fuck is the ninja, man?
and as to your 'name-dropping'. it is fine. never comes off as self serving or snobbish. (if that's even a word)
any questions then.... you know where i be. ;)
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